Now — double tetractys

by Belinda Munoz on March 9, 2011

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here
breathing
seizing life
blood pulsating
this ephemeral thrill in which I steep

there is no telling how long it will last
this divine dance
brazen beat
thrumming
now

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This piece was inspired by Ruined, a fantastic Pulitzer prize-winning play by Lynn Nottage about the horrific condition of the lives of the women and men in the Democratic Republic of Congo.  I remain hopeful that you & I & the rest of the world can and will do something to improve the now of the Congolese.  Now…

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This is a double tetractys for One Shot Wednesday.  A tetractys is a poetic form consisting of at least 5 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 10 syllables (total of 20).  The second verse in a double tetractys has an inverted syllable count of 5 lines of 10, 4, 3, 2, 1 syllables (total of 20).

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Image by bogenfreund

{ 16 comments… read them below or add one }

1 David Brydon March 9, 2011 at 3:32 am

This worked extremely well, and the simplicity (not undermining complexity of words or structure) of the brevity and word play was brilliant. Wonderful write!

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2 brian March 9, 2011 at 5:36 am

hey you dont know how long so get up and dance while you still can…smiles. and nice call to action on the congo…

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3 rob white March 9, 2011 at 5:48 am

Nice Belinda. For me it captures the exalted energy and freedom of dance… a feeling of freely expressing… I love that.

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4 ayala March 9, 2011 at 5:48 am

A great call to action….I remain hopeful as well that now is the time!

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5 Ben March 9, 2011 at 6:42 am

Carpe Diem. Time to seize that ephemeral thrill. Awesome poem.

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6 Laura Hegfield March 9, 2011 at 8:33 am

I felt the pulse moving through me as I read your words… the rhythm of longing to dance and reach out to all beings everywhere with compassion.

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7 The Exception March 9, 2011 at 9:29 am

Calls to action – Wonderfully written poetry… This post has it all.

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8 dustus March 9, 2011 at 12:54 pm

There is a palpable immediacy to your lines, but what really gets me is the shape the poem takes, which matches the pic, and even kind of looks like spillage. Awesome.

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9 Andy March 9, 2011 at 2:27 pm

Nicely done..and another new form to play with too!
🙂

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10 Jannie Funster March 9, 2011 at 3:01 pm

There really IS so much we can do to improve the now of so many people. A beautiful reminder wrapped in such a warm shawl of hope in this poem. Thank you, Dear Belinda.

xoxo

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11 Kavita March 9, 2011 at 11:32 pm

Wooww… loved the pace and rhythm in this one… I could almost hear music in the background… very nice!!
And the structure is fantastic!! I’ve got to try this!! Thanks for the info about the form…

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12 Marlee March 10, 2011 at 5:54 am

Hi Belinda,
This poem and your blog are beautiful. I have a heart for those hurting in the Congo and I appreciate your calling attention to their cry. I like what I see here. I’ll be back! 😉
Best,
Marlee

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13 Mama Zen March 10, 2011 at 6:21 am

This is amazing.

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14 Cathy March 10, 2011 at 3:14 pm

The words cadence are like a single breath – first in, then out. Great structure and the words work well.

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15 Olivia March 12, 2011 at 2:06 am

An awesome take Belinda!

Nice structure with music in it! The imagery played with is well done 🙂
Smiles xx

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16 Rudri Bhatt Patel @ Being Rudri March 15, 2011 at 1:12 pm

This is awesome. Poetry and awareness in one packed punch. Love the pace, rhythm, and message in your words

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