Sun

by Belinda Munoz on May 11, 2011

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Dazzle me.
Sizzle your spark. Beam
a light for
all to see
all that is good in this world,
dying and reborn.

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For imperfect prose.

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This is a shadorma, a six-line poetry form with the following number of syllables per line: 3-5-3-3-7-5.

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Image by Muffet

{ 17 comments… read them below or add one }

1 ayala May 11, 2011 at 5:37 am

“all that is good in this world, dying and reborn.” I love this line, Belinda. The sun warms our heart 🙂

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2 TheKitchenWitch May 11, 2011 at 6:40 am

I, too, loved the last line. Lovely.

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3 Indigo May 11, 2011 at 8:08 am

Beautiful. The last line enraptured me as well. (Hugs)Indigo

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4 Old Ollie May 11, 2011 at 12:15 pm

Nice tight poem – tough style too…and best of all great theme.

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5 Kati May 11, 2011 at 12:54 pm

What a great prayer! All that is good in this world… is so much.

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6 Craig May 11, 2011 at 12:56 pm

A Spanish haiku – brilliant – and the discipline!!! Harder than containing a tweet to 140 characters or less. And the message – I heart the message. This was awesome, smiling from ear to ear. Thank you. God Bless and keep you and all of yours.

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7 brian May 11, 2011 at 1:35 pm

simple and beautiful…great picture and yes rebirth…

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8 tinuviel May 11, 2011 at 1:43 pm

“Dazzle me” – what a bold prayer, like something David would have dared to ask! I like it.

Thanks for introducing me to an unfamiliar form, too. Will have to play with that myself. I’m so glad you visited crumbs and took time to comment so I would follow you here.

God bless you!

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9 Joybird May 11, 2011 at 2:21 pm

Dazzle me.
Sizzle your spark.

These words just leapt off the page with such vigor and joy…sweet!

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10 Marci | Liberating Choices May 11, 2011 at 6:32 pm

Love the photo and the sun 🙂

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11 Lisa notes... May 12, 2011 at 5:28 am

I see your gift, and am blessed by it, to be able to wrestle a thought into a structured format like this. And still have it overflow its edges. Just like the sun…

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12 Rudri Bhatt Patel @ Being Rudri May 12, 2011 at 12:26 pm

Succinct and evocative. Well done Belinda.

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13 Sheila Moore May 12, 2011 at 12:27 pm

wow, what an amazing photo! And I love that poetry form (have written a few myself.)
many blessings,
Sheila

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14 imperfect prose May 12, 2011 at 4:42 pm

Sizzle your spark.

LOVE this line… and the photo belinda, incredible. such talent, you.

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15 Alice Audrey May 12, 2011 at 7:27 pm

Oh! Oh! *hopping up and down* I want to be dazzled too!

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16 Rachel May 13, 2011 at 11:39 am

May your week be filled with light.

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17 Bluebell Books May 19, 2011 at 2:45 am

mind blowing..

impressed by your talent in wriitng ..keep it up.

check out short story slam today. hope to see your participation.

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