My all-in-one packaged
Promise in-a-box sailing with a
Broken compass on hope ocean
Your anticipated big moment
Unseen to the untrained eye
falling shy of hype by a jumbled step
His game of marbles on wooden
Machines clicking and sliding
Into the bin of obsolescence
Meanwhile, the cook spells magic
Sunlight sweeps the sea with sparkles
Layers of leaves crackle underfoot
You, me and him
Ensconced in warmth
Hands clasped, hearts full
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This is for One Shot Wednesday.
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What do you remember most about your days?
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You, me, and him.
love that line.
nice. this has a good feel to it…that opening stanza is a grabber…and i like the close…nice one shot!
Lovely imagery. What do I remember most about my day – winter’s tug at my collar, poppy faces, a baby asleep in a stroller, and the taste of chili chocolate on my tongue.
I picture parents watching a child experience a milestone. “You, me and him.” Charming.
That photo is stunning. If I could take a photo like that I’d die happy
Nice imagery. I think it is the little moments I remember from my days, such as dancing with my daughter, her hands in mine.
Meanwhile, the cook spells magic
Sunlight sweeps the sea with sparkles
Layers of leaves crackle underfoot
Brilliantly crafted words.
A wonderful poem! Evocative, with a lot of resonance!! Sticks to the ribs.
Great oneshot!
Lady Nyo
a very good day, indeed
Belinda…
Obsolescence?
I love it!
You Rock Baby…!!!
Great One Shot…G
it is full of warmth and promise for tomorrow
thanks for sharing with One shot
moonie smiles
Short lines, spare writing make this poem work as well as it does. Effective piece.
A beautiful poem,Belinda!
Pre-sliced, ready-to-use… the wonder of life… neat One Shot!
hope and promise, beautifully expressed.
I like your poem, and the picture is pretty.
Beautifully penned x
Shan
@Awdures
i loved the ..Promise in-a-box sailing with a
Broken compass on hope ocean…
very nice use of imagery in your poem belinda – enjoyed it!
Nice one. I like the rhythm of this.
Wow!!! Awe-some!
I remember the warmth of the sunshine..and the smiles in my day..all of the ones I was honored to experience..and those within my heart..Your work here sure brightened my smile..love it!
What an innovative way to gather up the sweerness of your family for us to see, feel and know. Thank you for a beautiful poem. Gay @beachanny
Beautiful imagery… and your words like ‘Broken compass on hope ocean’ were very interesting..
Thanks for sharing…
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kinda sits well with my poem this week…forgetting all thats packaged..all the hype and just enjoy you, em & him…great share,,,cheers pete
“You, me and him
Ensconced in warmth
Hands clasped, hearts full”
This brought such a smile to my face! I just love the image of you, your husband, and your son – what a great, loving family!
How do I remember my days? I think it is in moments. Simple, routine moments that warm my heart. Walking the dog. Holding hands with my husband. Laughing together.