Nobody

by Belinda Munoz on October 1, 2010

N
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b
o
d
y

knew who she was. Diminutive. Tattered
clothes. Appeared homeless. She smelled of
the streets; unpleasant odors we’d spritz
with Glade. None of it mattered.
She got off; her effect lingered.
Everyone’s still smiling since five stops
ago when she got on the
subway. For the record, someone else,
not I, called her presence angelic.

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I’m getting frisky with Mr. Linky today, linking up with Six Word Fridays (topic: for the record) and with 55 Flash Fiction Friday for the first time!

For more #sixwordfridays, go to Melissa’s lovely blog.

For more 55-word micro-fiction or #flashfiction, visit the One Shot Poetry team.

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1 brian October 1, 2010 at 1:29 am

nice. welcome to the world of 55…nicely done…love it when someone has sucha a positive attitude that it lifts the spirits of all around them…great 55.

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2 Hootin' Anni October 1, 2010 at 1:53 am

This is fantastic for your first 55!!

Here is my 55 link

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3 gautami tripathy October 1, 2010 at 4:51 am

Being an Indian, I can understand this very well. Such angels abound everywhere…

Here is my Haibun in 55 words!

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4 Katie October 1, 2010 at 5:21 am

Perspective and angels in our midst. Love it.

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5 TheKitchenWitch October 1, 2010 at 7:00 am

What a really cool post! I like the idea of 55.

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6 dustus October 1, 2010 at 7:05 am

Sometimes it takes others to point out the beauty we miss or have become conditioned not to see. Awesome 55!

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7 Aging Mommy October 1, 2010 at 7:24 am

Interesting. I like the surprise element of this being that people saw beneath the surface of this girl. There are so many just like her sadly.

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8 Talon October 1, 2010 at 7:31 am

The last sentence really sticks…

Really neat 55.

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9 Brook October 1, 2010 at 8:20 am

six words and 55? tricky. very nice work.

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10 Elle October 1, 2010 at 8:29 am

Amazing post!

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11 vodka logic October 1, 2010 at 8:44 am

Lovely..great imagery.

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12 joanny October 1, 2010 at 9:00 am

enjoyed reading your 55er nicely done.

Cheers,
Joanny
http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/

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13 Claudia October 1, 2010 at 9:33 am

..her effect lingered..and so positive – wouldn’t have thought it when you started…nice, angelic 55!

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14 Dia October 1, 2010 at 11:27 am

Nice Belinda, enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing

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15 Rudri October 1, 2010 at 11:46 am

55 words? Succinct, but still conveys a point. High five Belinda!

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16 Eric Alder October 1, 2010 at 11:48 am

Angels are often thought of as beautiful, pure white beings in immaculate dress… perhaps they’re much more subtle than that? Though-provoking 55.

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17 Gabriela Abalo October 1, 2010 at 12:46 pm

Brilliant 55!

mine is up.

have a great weekend

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18 Kristen @ Motherese October 1, 2010 at 1:36 pm

Well done, you frisky linker, you! Let me add my voice to the chorus of commenters congratulating you on your ability to tell a compelling story in so few words.

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19 Monkey Man October 1, 2010 at 1:41 pm

Great 55. What a picture you painted. Even the smells came across with nose grasping horror. My 55 is HERE .

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20 Patti October 1, 2010 at 1:44 pm

Welcome. Great beginning on 55. Angels sometimes hide in tatters. The wise find them anyway.

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21 Caroline Ross October 1, 2010 at 2:44 pm

I like the fact that the people were still smiling. At first I thought they were fake smiles, but then when you mentioned she was an angel I changed my mind. Very nice!

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22 Patty - Why Not Start Now? October 1, 2010 at 3:48 pm

Sweet. A word I keep using this week for some reason. But I think it applies here. Sweet in a good way.

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23 Melissa October 1, 2010 at 3:58 pm

Excellent! I can just see her…

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24 Moondustwriter October 1, 2010 at 6:08 pm

I guess my comment didn’t come in. I was coming back anyway.
SF is where I call my first home

Love your poem – the statement and the way it is handled
Love your style

Hope you visit us at One Shot again

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25 cj Schlottman October 1, 2010 at 6:28 pm

Very Cool. I didn’t know about 55. Sounds like fun. Your piece is thoughtful and well written. It’s so good when we can find the “angelic” that surrounds us every day but so often goes unnoticed.

Thanks……….cj

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26 Leslie October 1, 2010 at 7:17 pm

Wow! A challenge and a triumph. I really like the appearance of Glade. Juxtaposition at its best.

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27 Teresa October 1, 2010 at 7:18 pm

This is great. It’s such a true to life scene.

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28 Angela Artemis October 2, 2010 at 9:33 am

Belinda,
It brings back memories of my commute to NYC. Very good!

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29 Tess The Bold Life October 2, 2010 at 10:28 am

You never cease to amaze me!

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